Reviewer: BritinManor (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2024 02:08 AM · On: Chapter 11
I sure hope you are still seeing reviews as they come in. I just finished this, and there is a major mistake. I went through reviews on KD, MW, and AO3... and nobody commented on this.
The last four were told to go, Hannah, Belinda, Joe, and Loretta. Then you stated, the three left were Brian, Justin, and Marisol. But you didn't mention that Ethan was still part of the show. When Justin came out of the room, in chapter 11, Ethan even said to Justin, “Not everything,” Ethan said with a smirk. Then after the paragraph break, you said the last three were Brian, Justin, and Alice. So how could it go from Brian, Justin, and Marisol, to the guys and Alice? Then when their game started, it was just Brian, Justin, and Marisol. So how come it switched from Marisol, then Alice, then back to Marisol? I was so very confused.
That is such a major boo-boo. I'm shocked no one pointed that out.
I really liked the plot and the story. But there were inconsistencies, which made it hard to understand. One thing I wasn't very happy with, is that the whole family, and the whole of Pittsburgh, found out Justin had played hustler to get by in New York. Why would you have his mother watch and hear that?
Reviewer: Allison42 (Signed) · Date: September 27, 2024 02:16 PM · On: Chapter 11
Good ending!‘‘‘
Reviewer: Allison42 (Signed) · Date: September 27, 2024 01:56 PM · On: Chapter 10
*Hunter 🤬
Reviewer: Allison42 (Signed) · Date: September 27, 2024 01:30 PM · On: Chapter 10
Fuck Carl and Hi tee!😤😡🤬
Reviewer: Allison42 (Signed) · Date: September 27, 2024 01:16 PM · On: Chapter 9
Sam/Mel/Brian is a glorious train wreck - I love it!
I'm so upset for Justin! Who could the evil higher up possibly be??? And who gave them those answers? I'm guessing Ethan or Michael?
Reviewer: Allison42 (Signed) · Date: September 27, 2024 12:16 PM · On: Chapter 8
Holy shit! I did not see that coming!!
Reviewer: Allison42 (Signed) · Date: September 27, 2024 02:44 AM · On: Chapter 7
HA!!!!!! Brian and Mel are siblings! That's SO PERFECT!!!!!!!!
Reviewer: Lorma (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2022 10:00 PM · On: Chapter 11
I really like this ending. I'm glad Justin got the upper hand and took control. I'm really happy that he and Brian are together with Frida. Good story!
Reviewer: wellreadbunny (Signed) · Date: July 04, 2022 07:39 AM · On: Chapter 11
Thank you for finishing this story. I couldn't wait to see how you would end it, good job.
Reviewer: EmeryFelton (Signed) · Date: July 02, 2022 08:43 PM · On: Chapter 11
This was WONDERFUL!!! I was on the edge of my seat through so much of this. I was having a super boring day at work and while I totally had other things I probably should have been doing, I decided to read your work instead and I regret NOTHING!!! There were so many twists, I didn't know what to expect! Thank you for sharing this with us!
Author's Response: Thank you. I took way too long to finish it but am happy that I did. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Reviewer: britintaykin (Signed) · Date: February 25, 2022 05:08 AM · On: Chapter 10
Please update i need more of this story
Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: February 11, 2022 04:39 AM · On: Chapter 10
😱😱🤨😱
Reviewer: Crookedhalo1 (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2022 05:51 PM · On: Chapter 10
P.S. Carl needs his ass kicked
Reviewer: Crookedhalo1 (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2022 05:50 PM · On: Chapter 10
hmm Mr Big Time???
Reviewer: Marny (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2022 05:29 PM · On: Chapter 10
Aggrr I need an update ASAP.
* hugs *
Reviewer: wellreadbunny (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2022 03:23 PM · On: Chapter 10
It's not fair to bring in a new enemy no one knows about. Justin is not superficial or snooty, he just knows his value.
Reviewer: Draccone (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2022 06:37 PM · On: Chapter 10
Oh my God. So horrible. I knew it from the beginning when Craig was there. I was like why he gets all this attention on him. Then I was like well, the story is about them so it's going to gear more towards than other people, but now we can see someone is coming after Justin. Ahhhhhh. Update soon!
Reviewer: Crookedhalo1 (Signed) · Date: January 08, 2022 03:50 PM · On: Chapter 9
I think either Ethan or the Sap is working on the show
Author's Response: The new chapter is up, that hints at some but I'll say, somethings can be deceiving.
Reviewer: 7wildwaysup (Signed) · Date: January 08, 2022 02:21 PM · On: Chapter 9
That was fun. I’m so glad you’re continuing it. Looking forward to more!
Hugs ~ Kathleen
Author's Response: Thank you so much.
Reviewer: Oh_Viv (Signed) · Date: January 08, 2022 02:13 PM · On: Chapter 9
Thank you for the new chapter.
But who's messing around with our sunshine?!
I hope that persons got punished in the end.
Author's Response: We're getting closer with new chapter but not all is as it seems.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: September 11, 2021 12:18 AM · On: Chapter 7
Brian and Melanie related. How will that turn out.
Reviewer: Oh_Viv (Signed) · Date: September 09, 2021 02:01 PM · On: Chapter 8
Wow, I guess I will never know what will come next in this story.
But I'm glad it all worked out between Brian & Justin in the end, and this time they can raise up a baby together. (Fingers crossed)🤞
Reviewer: bksbracelet (Signed) · Date: September 09, 2021 07:03 AM · On: Chapter 8
Wow that was a full on chapter great one though
Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: September 02, 2021 01:41 AM · On: Chapter 7
OMG!!!!! Melanie and Brian FAMILY!!!! ROFLMAO!! You are killing it!! With these Twists!!!!I didn’t see that Coming!!!!
Why do I have the feeling it’s about to get Wild up in here!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. Because it will but some more secrets might come to light in the next chapter.
Reviewer: sophiesmom (Signed) · Date: September 01, 2021 02:36 AM · On: Chapter 7
No effing way are Brian and Melanie brother and sister. What a surprising twist.
Justin and Brian in bed together with Ethan laying there? Hahahahah what karma.
Blake is hooked on fan forum, who wouldn't be.
Sam Sam Sam get your family togrther. Can't wait for that. Ha!
Author's Response: I guess it's a good thing that Brian wasn't the donor for Mel now. This story would have been so awkard then.
Reviewer: Oh_Viv (Signed) · Date: August 31, 2021 09:03 PM · On: Chapter 7
I was worried for a minute that Brian will lose then the hidden task will jeopardise their relationship. But what a relief, he married (almost) an artist!
And Brian and Malenie are siblings! Oh my God!
Author's Response: I always thought they had a lot of similarities.
Reviewer: sophiesmom (Signed) · Date: August 29, 2021 02:23 AM · On: Chapter 6
Love Alice. A sly lady when she needs to be. Melissa needed to go. Tom is going to be next if he keeps spewing his hate towards Brian and Justin.
Ethan, jealous much?
Took Justin long enough to figure what Brian was up to. Ha! Justin called him on it, Brian celebrated by "cumming clean".
Reviewer: Oh_Viv (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2021 04:14 PM · On: Chapter 6
They should be voted for as the hottest the couple of the show! Not to be voting out! Lol
By the way, Ian rally deserves Kip, they are both big fat lairs!
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2021 03:06 PM · On: Chapter 6
If Justin was voted out how would Brian leave?
Reviewer: Crookedhalo1 (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2021 05:22 AM · On: Chapter 6
yeah like Justin was falling off the Kinney cliff
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2021 02:19 AM · On: Chapter 5
Well at least Brian is fooling the people in charge.
Author's Response: He's good when people don't know him. LOL
Reviewer: sophiesmom (Signed) · Date: August 25, 2021 09:35 PM · On: Chapter 5
This is getting confusing but I'll hang in.
If Justin was thinking clearly he should know what Brian's up tp. Should be able to "read" him.
Eww Brian has to share a bed with the fiddler? Yeah, get rid of Ethan as quickly as possible, he'd only slow down Justins chances to win. Meena's a smart girl.
Ha! Michael waiting for a new Captain Astro movie to be made and wanting to watch it in Em's screening room. Like either is going to happen. Ooh my sides hurt from laughing just thinking about that.
Author's Response: Yeah, Justin wasn't thinking clearly and the Time Out was actually good for him. Yeah, Brian and Ethan sharing a bed, not what either want. Well, it never really says how popular Captain Astro is so maybe he's like our Green Lantern and there is like a billion of them.
Reviewer: Crookedhalo1 (Signed) · Date: August 25, 2021 01:45 PM · On: Chapter 5
ick, just saying. I need a stronger Justin. Love Hunter's girl figuring it out & Love a Blake mention
Author's Response: I understand because I like a strong Justin too but you have to understand at that moment he was at his lowest and needed a bit of time to rebound. In the time of just over a week he was in the house with the man who tried to kill him. Then his father who attacked him and he couldn't leave because of he would be out of the show. That brought back his PTSD and then Brian was there and he felt he could breath again only to have Brian turn him away like it was six years prior. He needed a break to recover, and maybe the Time Out is just enough for that.
Reviewer: Oh_Viv (Signed) · Date: August 25, 2021 12:32 PM · On: Chapter 5
I was laughing so much for the last chapter and this one made me want to cry.
I know Brian means well, but still nobody wants to see sunshine hurt.
Does he have to take Brody to shower in order to help sunshine win?!😢
Author's Response: I'm sorry, I broke the funny back in the new chapter, I promise.
Reviewer: Oh_Viv (Signed) · Date: August 24, 2021 09:58 AM · On: Chapter 4
OMG!I love how this story goes! I've always guessed that Brian would have join the show, but I didn't expecting he was joining WITH Ethan at the same time, and they have to share the bed!?lol If there is an show like that, I'm definitely going to subscribe the vip package!!! I love it!!!
Author's Response: I would totally watch it too. The fireworks would be crazy. Thank you so much.
Reviewer: Marny (Signed) · Date: August 23, 2021 03:05 AM · On: Chapter 4
Read all chapters in one go. Haha I wanted to click next chapter * cries * .. Please I need the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm sorry, lol. I'm so happy you are liking it. New chapter is up.
Reviewer: sophiesmom (Signed) · Date: August 23, 2021 12:53 AM · On: Chapter 4
omg let the fun begin. Forget the Justin and Brody show. this is going to be so much better.
Can't wait for chapter 5. Brian against Brody for Justin's affections while the chin rat does what?
YUM!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I do have a few things up my sleeve. LOL.
Reviewer: Crookedhalo1 (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2021 10:31 PM · On: Chapter 4
ha ha ha ha ha ha, Calm down Sunshine!
Author's Response: That's Brian.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2021 08:03 PM · On: Chapter 4
Hehehe. What a surprise and judging by Justin's reaction a pleasant one.
Author's Response: Very pleasant but will it stay that way?
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 21, 2021 09:37 PM · On: Chapter 3
Craig is in deep trouble. You need to get Brian on the show, now that would be fun to watch.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 21, 2021 09:37 PM · On: Chapter 3
Craig is in deep trouble. You need to get Brian on the show, now that would be fun to watch.
Reviewer: Crookedhalo1 (Signed) · Date: August 21, 2021 04:32 PM · On: Chapter 3
it just proves the obvious the reason Justin doesn't get along with these people is because, their assholes. They are not his rivals it's because their assholes. Oh, btw, I so love this story!!
Reviewer: sophiesmom (Signed) · Date: August 21, 2021 04:23 AM · On: Chapter 3
Brian has to start paying attention to what's going on. Stop daydreaming.
Craig might be out of the show but things are going to get really bad for him. Loved how Justin stood up to him and explained why his business is going down the drain. I can't believe he wanted Justin to cheat and give him half the money. That man is just sick.
Daph, did she even take a breath before her rant? No wonder her and Justin get along so well. One can't get a word in edgewise while the other is talking.
New title for the show...Fun with Justin and Brody.. Ha!
Reviewer: ForeverLove50 (Signed) · Date: August 20, 2021 03:32 AM · On: Chapter 2
WOW! This is really getting good! I love this story line and all the other characters. Wasn’t expecting DAD. Can’t wait to see where you take this and what happens Next!! I was literally hanging on each chapter I read. Hurry up! Post More !!! lol
Reviewer: Lorma (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2021 04:48 PM · On: Chapter 2
This is great! Interesting storyline.
Reviewer: sophiesmom (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2021 01:22 PM · On: Chapter 2
Evil #1 gone evil #2 shows up. Craig going for Father of the Year? Never wanted his son hurt. Ha! He hurt him, just not physically, but hurt him he did.
Good challenge. Craig drew a cat and gave up. Justin certainly doesn't take after him.
The bothers are back on track together, on to everyone else. Hope that doctor's wife give it to him good.
Reviewer: sophiesmom (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2021 01:16 PM · On: Chapter 1
Oh this is going to be fun.
Damn, Chris Hobbs the worst of two evils.
Everyone coming to the loft, Justin having to see Hobbs again. Too much for Brian to handle. Not surprised he signed on for 24/7 access.
Justin saying hi to Gus was really sweet.
On to next chapter.
Reviewer: sophiesmom (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2021 01:16 PM · On: Chapter 1
Oh this is going to be fun.
Damn, Chris Hobbs the worst of two evils.
Everyone coming to the loft, Justin having to see Hobbs again. Too much for Brian to handle. Not surprised he signed on for 24/7 access.
Justin saying hi to Gus was really sweet.
On to next chapter.
Reviewer: Predec2 (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2021 01:14 PM · On: Chapter 2
This is so unique! I have never seen a plot line like this before.
I didn't see Craig's appearance at all coming. This should be very interesting to observe the interaction between him and his son.. So glad you decided to start posting this on here!
I am very much looking forward to reading the rest. Thank you. ~Kim
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2021 02:59 AM · On: Chapter 2
Such fun. Glad Chris was deleted.
Reviewer: YumYumPM (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2021 02:47 AM · On: Chapter 1
Wow. This is going to be good.
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